Lesson
Nine: Getting Personal
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Getting
Personal
If we
had met you five years ago and then met you again today,
how would we say that you have changed? Include specific
examples that characterize your development. (Sloan)
In thirty
to forty years, when you reflect back on your life, what
criteria will you use when judging if you have been successful?
What are the main achievements/events that you hope will
have taken place? (Anderson)
Please
provide us with a summary of your personal and family background.
Include information about where you grew up, your parents'
occupations, your siblings, and perhaps a highlight or
special memory from your youth. (Anderson)
Each
of us has been influenced by the people, events, and situations
occurring in our lives. How have these influences shaped
who you are today? (Stanford)
What
seminal influences or experiences, broadly defined (a book,
teacher, friend, relative, sojourn, hobby, and so forth),
have especially contributed to your personal development?
What correlation, if any, does your personal development
have to your professional goals? (Berkeley)
Describe
yourself and the significant events that have shaped you.
(Michigan)
All essay
questions, as we have already mentioned, are a way for the
admissions committee to learn more about you personally. The
getting personal questions just ask more directly than others.
They give you a direct opportunity to speak for yourself. They
can be tricky, though, because they are often extremely open-ended.
Be selective.
You cannot include every detail about yourself, so you have
to pick wisely. Some applicants want to tell everything, fearful
that they will leave out a crucial detail on which their acceptance,
and future, could hinge. Do not give in to this temptation.
Instead, focus on one or two significant qualities or characteristics
that give the admissions committee genuine insight into you.
Many of the
questions in this category are worded creatively or ask you
to use your imagination. This is intended to get you to loosen
up and be yourself. If the question takes you off guard, let
it-it means the committee is looking for an unguarded answer.
This makes many applicants uncomfortable. They try to present
themselves objectively but end up distancing themselves from
the subject matter with overly long words and a dry, academic
tone. This is a grave mistake since the whole point of this
essay is to reveal something about yourself. Therefore, put
your heart into this essay.
This category
does not have one standard question-every school asks it in
a different way. Although each school's question will differ
from the next, most of the personal questions still fit into
one of three categories: personal development, personal goals,
or personal background and influence. If you are having trouble
with a specific question, try to approach it from the vantage
point of one of these categories. See if the tips and advice
given below help.
Personal
Development
If we had
met you five years ago and then met you again today, how would
we say that you have changed? Include specific examples that
characterize your development.
This question
tries to find out about you by asking how you have grown and
developed over the past few years. Making you compare yourself
at two different stages of your life is a clever way to get
you to open up about who you really are. Although you do want
to show that you have matured, remember that the child is father
of the man. Do not overplay what a terrible person you once
were just to make the point of what a great person you are
now. No one changes that much in five years. Do, however, highlight
one or two turning points or significant events, and show how
they have affected you. They need not be dramatic, just personally
meaningful. Also remember to show that you took a proactive
as well as a reactive role in your own development. How did
your growth result from the decisions you made and the actions
you took? Significant events and people can serve as inspiration,
but real change always results from the work, effort, and initiative
you have put into yourself.
Personal Goals
In thirty to forty years, when
you reflect back on your life, what criteria will you use
when judging if you have been successful? What are the
main achievements/events that you hope will have taken
place?
This question, although worded creatively,
really just asks you what goals you have set for your personal
life. The only difference is that you will talk about your
goals in the past tense, as though they have already happened.
The inevitable question here (especially for women) becomes,
is it OK to say that I want a family? If that truly is a goal
(and it is for most people), then yes, of course you can write
about it. Admissions officers have a grasp on reality and they
understand that, business person or not, most people end up
married and with children. To expect otherwise would be unrealistic
and naive.
Not mentioning marriage and family
is fine, too. If the subject makes you uncomfortable, leave
it out. Because it is expected, it is often left unsaid. You
might want to focus instead on one or two unique goals of yours.
Do you want to have traveled to a certain place, climbed a
specific mountain, or run the Boston Marathon by then? Perhaps
you have smaller goals, like learning to play the piano or
cook a gourmet meal.
Many people look at their goals
from a grander scale by choosing overriding themes like philanthropy
and discussing the ways in which they hope the theme will have
come into fruition. No matter what you choose, show that you
have a realistic goal and not just a pipe dream. Either outline
a game plan or prove that you have already taken the first
steps toward making the goals come true. Most important of
all, do not forget to mention the role that your business career
will have had in helping you attain your goals and lead a fulfilling
personal life. Goals can be personal and still include your
career.
Personal Background and Influence
Please provide us with a summary
of your personal and family background. Include information
about where you grew up, your parents' occupations, your
siblings, and perhaps a highlight or special memory from
your youth. (Anderson)
Each of us has been influenced
by the people, events, and situations occurring in our
lives. How have these influences shaped who you are today?
(Stanford)
What seminal influences or
experiences, broadly defined (a book, teacher, friend,
relative, sojourn, hobby, and so forth), have especially
contributed to your personal development? What correlation,
if any, does your personal development have to your professional
goals? (Berkeley)
Describe yourself and the significant
events that have shaped you. (Michigan)
This type of question is similar
to the role model question. It attempts to learn more about
you through the forces that have shaped you. Many applicants
mistakenly believe that this is an essay about a trip, a person,
or a pastime. They go on at length, describing the influence
in detail, without making a connection between it and themselves.
The school is not interested in learning more about a dear
relative, a memorable holiday, or a motivational book. They
are interested in learning more about you. Demonstrate which
qualities of the person or experience under discussion have
influenced you and in what ways.
What specific aspect(s) of the book,
person, or event made an impression on you and how? What action
did you take to turn this impression into personal development
and change? This is the key. You must make clear that the influence
had an identifiable impact. Did your uncle's willingness to
take risks and ability to bounce back from failure inspire
you to pick up and move on after a personal setback? Did a
trip to a factory in a third-world country cause you to reconsider
your position about child labor laws? This is the type of information
business schools seek when they ask this question.
A question can be daunting when
it asks you to describe your family background. No family is
ideal. You need not have had 1.5 siblings, a dog, and a white
picket fence in order to write comfortably about your family.
In fact, a unique background will set you apart. Still, this
is no place to air dirty laundry. If this question has you
staring uncomfortably at a blank page, then stop thinking about
trying to describe your entire family history in a few paragraphs.
Just think of two or three defining moments or interesting
incidents. Concentrate on bringing them to life. You will then
find that by focusing on the parts, you have painted an accurate
picture of the whole.
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If we
had met you five years ago and then met you again today,
how would we say that you have changed? Include specific
examples that characterize your development.
Five years
ago I was twenty years old, just finishing up my first semester
of my sophomore year in school. I had curly blond hair down
to my waist and had never worked a full-time job in my life.
I had only been out of the country two times. I found the
white, preppy uniformity of Georgetown to be familiar and
comforting.
Now I live
in a rowdy, crazy, colorful, slightly shady neighborhood
in Washington, D.C.; I couldn't get out of Georgetown fast
enough after graduation. I love to walk down the street and
see men in dresses or the Rastas who sit in front of Safeway
vending incense and such. I lived and traveled abroad for
a full year. I've had a Real Job for over two and a half
years. And the further I get from school the more I rediscover
a creative spirit that was dormant for four years-I love
to paint and draw and write now, which I didn't do at all
during college.
But the
biggest changes have been in how I relate to my work and
the people around me. In the past five years, I learned that
the most important achievement in life is to be truly happy.
And reaching that goal, for me, required that I try looking
at the world with a new view.
I learned
how to learn. I was never much of a student-I did the minimum
amount of work required to get good grades, and rarely more.
That lasted until I was studying at the London School of
Economics. The first paper I handed in there came back with
a D and comments that indicated the professor felt actual
pity and concern for a student of my low caliber. I found
out quickly that the study methods I had used throughout
my life were not acceptable at the LSE. Rather than just
memorizing the notes of the professor's lecture, and my highlighted
notes from the textbook, I actually had to use the list of
10-15 books that accompanied each day's lecture, do my own
research on the topic, and genuinely understand the concepts
in question, backwards and forwards. It was exhilarating.
I regretted all the wonderful courses and professors I had
wasted in the past. I began my senior year at Georgetown
with a new enthusiasm, and ended my fall semester with my
first 4.0.
I've learned
to enjoy the small moments of joy that every day contains.
I've learned that it's okay to pass up one party, because
another is sure to come along. Right after my freshman year
in school I spent a summer in Boston caring for my sister
and her two-year-old son after she had surgery. Basically,
every moment I spent in domestic activity was a small hell
for me. I was sure that the city held wonders untold, but
I was chained inside, cooking, cleaning, grocery shopping,
reading "Once Upon A Potty" over and over and over.
This year, as I visited my sister for Christmas, I was cast
into the Mommy role again when she hurt her knee skiing.
This time I relished every minute of it. I played chess with
the seven-year-old, and tried to teach the two-month-old
to say "Elvis". I delivered cups of tea and bags
of ice to my fallen sister, and whipped up a special pot
of soup for everyone when we all came down with the same
cold. I let my brother-in-law hide in a corner with my nice
new laptop. I was actually glad that I barely left the house.
I've mellowed out.
I've learned
to forgive myself. I'm always my own worst critic, especially
when I made mistakes. I could torment myself with a past
failure for weeks. But in my current job I've had the chance
to fall on my face several times, and to see that the world
does not stop turning when I do. One of my bosses has a motto: "Let's
turn this negative into a positive"-in his world, there
is no failure because there is always a lesson to be learned,
at the very least. After a couple of years of being subjected
to this unrelenting optimism, I finally yielded and accepted
it. I learned that time spent worrying over a mistake is
wasted time-instead, I should be figuring out how to correct
the mistake and move on.
I've learned
to be a positive member of the team. Attitude counts. I will
admit that I used to indulge myself in the occasional prima
donna fit. I was aware of my value at the company, that there
were many things that only I knew how to do, and I played
on it to get my way. But this past summer I worked with a
vendor, the owner of a mailhouse, who changed my whole way
of thinking. Though the work that her company did was timely
and basically error-free, dealing with this woman drove me
up a wall. She had no concept of customer service-any error
that her mailhouse made was somehow our fault. She would
not take responsibility for mistakes, she refused to do little
things that would have saved us money or made our job easier,
and I could never get her off the phone before her life story
came out. So even though the mailhouse produced quality work,
I will not be using them again next year because working
with her was so unpleasant. This taught me an important lesson:
it doesn't matter how good your work is-if you're a pain
to work with, that's what people remember and react to. Since
then I've endeavored to present a consistently pleasant face
to my coworkers; whenever I feel a little cranky, I hear
the voice of Melissa and just relax.
In five
years, I've grown more confident, more secure, and more at
ease. I wouldn't say I'm a different person that I was at
twenty, but I'm definitely an improved version. Plus-the
biggest change of all-I'm a brunette now.
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